some haiku variations on a magpie theme

Magpie lock 
 

Don't unlock me now;

maybe later, or Tuesday.

Until then, I'm yours.

 

Unlock me Tuesday.

Tuesday's the first opening;

after that, it's May.

 

Unlock me in May;

but only on a Tuesday.

Or, let's wait until April.

 

This is a Magpie Tale.  For more creative responses to Willow’s wonderful visual prompts, visit here.  Go ahead – give it a try!  Stretching your creative muscles is good for you.

40 Comments

  1. Reply
    Crazy Grandma August 2, 2010

    Lovely, I truly felt connected to your poem. Thanks. Sometimes, we just need to have patience. Well done.

  2. Reply
    Jingle August 2, 2010

    very sharp and fun magpie.
    I enjoyed reading it.
    Tuesdays in May,
    What a lucky day!

  3. Reply
    Boonsong August 2, 2010

    Seventeen syllables of wonder. I love haiku. It’s my favourite poetry form. Thanks for this.
    All the best, Boonsong

  4. Reply
    Helen August 2, 2010

    Separately … and together, your Magpie haikus are really nice!

  5. Reply
    Marilyn August 3, 2010

    Very cleverly done, I have never written haiku. I like the indecisiveness of it …Or, lets wait until April.

  6. Reply
    Jennifer August 3, 2010

    Thanks Crazy Grandma! Glad you visited.

  7. Reply
    Jennifer August 3, 2010

    Tuesdays are underrated, wouldn’t you say Jingle? Thanks for visiting.

  8. Reply
    Jennifer August 3, 2010

    I love haiku too Boonsong – maybe I should have treated it with a little more respect? 🙂

  9. Reply
    Jennifer August 3, 2010

    Thanks Helen – was fooling around with the form, and decided to use three!

  10. Reply
    Jennifer August 3, 2010

    Indecisive – and procrastinating? Thanks Marilyn!

  11. Reply
    Little hat August 3, 2010

    Lovely and funny Jennifer. I love the last one. It’s got a certain flow. The first one on the other hand uses a sort of arhythymic element to emphasise the indecisiveness.
    Was that all there? Or is the great thing about poetry and haiku the fact that the reader takes it way beyond where it began.

  12. Reply
    Patience Ray August 3, 2010

    I love them all together, an interesting way of showing-off haikus. awesome

  13. Reply
    Jennifer August 3, 2010

    Well absolutely a reader would (should) take something unique from a bit of writing – but I did use the punctuation to emphasise the dithering… 🙂 (Is punctuation allowed in haiku?)

  14. Reply
    Jennifer August 3, 2010

    Thanks Patience! It started out as playing with several to create one – then I thought it would be fun to go with variations!

  15. Reply
    Catherine August 3, 2010

    These are good alone but great all strung together.
    I’m lovin’ Magpie!

  16. Reply
    Ruth August 3, 2010

    Hesitating at the opening to … what? And isn’t that just it? Oh, this sounds so me, too. 🙂
    I loved it!

  17. Reply
    Jennifer August 3, 2010

    Thanks Catherine – I thought the variations were a fun way to present. Glad you visited.

  18. Reply
    Jennifer August 3, 2010

    One would get in trouble, I suppose, if it were hesitating for the sake of hesitating? You’re right! Thanks for popping by Ruth.

  19. Reply
    ~T~ August 3, 2010

    I like the combination you’ve unlocked. Feels familiar!

  20. Reply
    Kavita August 3, 2010

    That really was very creative! The art of procrastination!
    The lock’s here, the key fits.. but the fear (of something) keeps one from unlocking…
    Beautifully put here, Jennifer…

  21. Reply
    willow August 3, 2010

    What a lovely triple haiku delight!

  22. Reply
    Jennifer August 3, 2010

    Glad to hear it ~T~! And thanks for visiting.

  23. Reply
    Jennifer August 3, 2010

    You’re right on Kavita. From this angle anyway! 🙂 I’m glad you stopped in!

  24. Reply
    Jennifer August 3, 2010

    Well it was triple fun to write them Willow!

  25. Reply
    KatheW August 3, 2010

    cleverly done in triplicate!

  26. Reply
    Tattered and Lost August 4, 2010

    Me think things happen in spring. Under lock and key come fall?
    Quite lovely.

  27. Reply
    ninotaziz August 4, 2010

    I love the playful nature of your haiku which reminds me of the Mad Hatter somehow!
    Really unexpected – and yet works out excellently. Like a bonus in June!
    I am so so glad you dropped by.
    P/S I loved Toronto!

  28. Reply
    EKSwitaj August 4, 2010

    This desire to delay is something with which I can definitely identify.

  29. Reply
    Zuzu August 4, 2010

    I was at work all day, but reading your haiku really hit the spot! I love it, it’s refreshing!

  30. Reply
    ds August 4, 2010

    Totally fun, and so very true (yes, no, maybe, april). Love these!
    Thank you for stopping by my blog and leaving a bit of yourself there.

  31. Reply
    Tumblewords August 4, 2010

    What fun! I love the freedom of this and the what-iffery.

  32. Reply

    I really enjoyed these and the rolling nature of them.

  33. Reply
    Jennifer August 5, 2010

    Thanks in triplicate Kathe!

  34. Reply
    Jennifer August 5, 2010

    Hmm methinks so too! 🙂

  35. Reply
    Jennifer August 5, 2010

    Thanks for visiting me too ninotaziz! Glad you loved Toronto!

  36. Reply
    Jennifer August 5, 2010

    The best thing a writer could ask for is someone to identify with a piece! Thaks EK!

  37. Reply
    Jennifer August 5, 2010

    Aw, gratified to hear it Zuzu!

  38. Reply
    Jennifer August 5, 2010

    And thank you for stopping by too DS. Appreciate your comment.

  39. Reply
    Jennifer August 5, 2010

    Hehe, thanks TW!

  40. Reply
    Jennifer August 5, 2010

    Aw, glad pal. Thanks!

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